Tuesday, June 21, 2011

Wind in my Heart

caressing
touching
my slumbering heart

whistling
singing
a lovely song

grazing
playing
waking me at last

swishing
whooshing
bringing me pain

crying
singing
a lonely song
@wenavee


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Dani suggested this week’s prompt: Wind @ One Single Impression




at 5:31 PM
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8 comments:

  1. The Write GirlJune 21, 2011 at 6:14 PM

    Beautiful, sad, and touching at the same time.

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  2. Brian MillerJune 21, 2011 at 6:22 PM

    you progress through several emotions in such short space...nice...

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  3. AmityJune 21, 2011 at 11:54 PM

    it is very beautiful...like a lonesome song, full of longings! loved it :)

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  4. MonikaJune 22, 2011 at 3:14 AM

    I liked the style, slowly engaging the reader into its very essence, a sad grief, a beautiful tale engrossed.
    Lovely!

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  5. dustusJune 22, 2011 at 11:33 AM

    Love the progressive use of tense, followed by your third lines in the stanza. Nice uniformity to your smooth poem.

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  6. Pat HattJune 22, 2011 at 11:36 AM

    Great emotional ride with this piece, nicely done.

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  7. ayalaJune 22, 2011 at 3:20 PM

    This is an emotional journey... Nicely written.

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  8. JingleJune 24, 2011 at 1:39 AM

    love your word play.

    you send me flying
    and smiling.

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